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On A sunny day there lived A boy named James and his brother named Jack. They were out feeding the animals until they were finish,so they sat down on A bale of hay and started to think what they can do today.

But suddenly they heard A nose so they rushed outside and it was there dad Mac he was on his quad biker to see if the animals were ok so James and Jack had and idea so they ran to there dad and said “dad can we use your quad bike please” and they were so lucky that there dad was kind and lends them his quad biker.

So they both hopped on and off they went to find a nice place to race but as they were going they found just the right spot it was called Beverly Hills then Jack said to James “I wonder why its called Beverly Hills?

As they were thinking James didn’t want to think any longer so he told his brother that he is going to beat him at the race so he hopped on and off he went he was pretty good that his brother stopped thinking and told him that he was showing off.

As James was riding he went far and far until Jake heard a crash so he ran to where he heard it and there he saw James,James was crying and telling him to go home and  tell their mom and dad so Jake ran as fast as he could and once again he made it home first he went straight to the phone and called 111 then he told his mom and dad to go to Beverly Hills.

As they got there the ambulance were already taking him inside the car and off they went to the hospital it didn’t take that long until the doctor came out and said “it was a close call”.Two months later he was back to normal and he also learned from his mistake

                             THE END BYE ANISHA